Thursday, May 5, 2011

Rusty heart

      Sometimes  young  love
  can truly last... but she won’t
take the                  risk, for the  
 times her                  heart  was 
     broken is            a long and
                             tiring list.
                         It’s been 
                    so  long 
               since she
             has loved
             She's  not 
              sure if she 
               can, silent

                tears leak 
           down her cheeks
          Why does  no  one 
              understand?

9 comments:

  1. I especially like the title to this, "Rusty Heart" since it evokes the damaging/corrosive nature of rust, the saltiness of tears, and even the colour of blood. Well thought out.

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  2. Wow, your poems are beautiful by themselves, but molding them into artwork is even more stunning. Glad I stumbled upon your blog. (I was following a link from Lisa Vooght's blog.)

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  3. i like this even though it is sad

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  4. Well sometimes love goes wrong. L:

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  5. oh wow this is so cool, well done and well expressed. in french, we call that a calligramme. is there an english term for it?
    thanks for visiting my blog, sorry i was absent for a little but now im fully back
    diablessse

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  6. Thank you. (: I will have to look up the English term, and you're welcome! I loved it.

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  7. I like the mix between the shape of the question mark and the poem.
    It is what love brings to life when you think about it - a big ?

    Lovely and Touching.

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  8. Thank you! That seems to be true. /:,

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